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Scott Barnett
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In the sixth panel, Kitty is supposed to be "swimming" thru the debris, not bursting out like Superman. Still trying to think of a better way to portray that.
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Honestly, I didn't get a Superman vibe from that panel. Looked more like her wading through the debris to me. I think the POV you chose accomplished that for you, perhaps.
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Michael Penn
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Tough to depict "swimming" through debris. Kitty has to be
seen as moving, but the debris completely still.
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Steven Queen
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Like Scott, I also did not get a Superman-burst vibe, and thought it worked just fine as is.
However, in the spirit of trying to be helpful...maybe something more of a breast-stroke posture? Cupped hands pushing backwards, legs clearly not braced to push?
Also: The swimming/floating through very thick solids feels like a new aspect, or at least unexplored view, of her power. Nice touch.
Edited by Steven Queen on 16 June 2020 at 7:35am
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Wilson Mui
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The sixth panel looked fine to me. Maybe
it would have been slightly better to see
her phase through some of the debris?
I love seeing the different levels. (I
hope Carla doesn't have to clean those
floors also.)
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Eric Sofer
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ITEM: When Kitty is moving through debris and such, you might consider showing more as running than flying. I don't often see flyers in a running pose - but obviously someone who is literally running would... well, look as if they're running.
ITEM: Wherein the problem with calling the Safe Room just that? Sometimes we need a real world description to impress what it really is. I recall another discussion where we tried to rename comic books, and we had a bit of a problem finding another name.
ITEM: Speaking of "Safe" room... I remember an issue of New Mutants where the government was attacking the Xavier Mansion (in the Future Past timeline), and Xavier was at a window trying to convince them to stop. Rachel Summers was with him, and his oxymoron comment to her was (as I recall), "Get down to the Danger Room, child - you'll be safe there!"
And then Xavier was shot down, but he should have been in the Danger Room.
ITEM: To quote Willy Wonka: " I always thought a verruca was a type of wart you got on the bottom of your foot."
Edited by Eric Sofer on 16 June 2020 at 7:54am
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John Byrne
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The Danger Room WOULD be a safe place—provided no one turned it on while you were in there!As for Rachel, may I simply say AAAARRRRGGGGGGHHHH!!!!!!!!
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Samuel P. Barden
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Phew! I was worried about Carla and Pablo!
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Richard Palmgren
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As for Rachel, may I simply say...-----------------------------------------
And you know it got a lot worse...
Since Rachel and Franklin Richards were an "item" in Days of Future, etc, they end up producing a kid, HYPERSTORM, who becomes an FF villain
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Steven Queen
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I wish I could "un-read" that last bit.
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Andrew Bitner
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Hyperstorm is just such an awful name. Honestly, weren't there any even slightly-better codenames available?
As to the prevailing subject: SafeSpace Safe Room Vault Lockdown Room Zone Omega 7 Black
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Andrew Bitner
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Although "Safety Cube" is pretty good. Suggests that there are "safety cubes" scattered throughout the building like residential lifeboats.
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Andrew Bitner
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...which triggers a thought. Does Cerebro have a "black box" in case of catastrophic failure?
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