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Matt Hawes Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 05 October 2022 at 7:27am | IP Logged | 1
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I have to confess to liking the previous version more. The white-line cross-hatching running through the fold in the cloth looks unnatural and distracts. It doesn't give the impression that what I am looking at is made of cloth. The previous version is more on the mark.
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Paul Wills Byrne Robotics Member
Joined: 18 August 2018 Location: United States Posts: 901
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Posted: 05 October 2022 at 2:38pm | IP Logged | 2
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Thanks, Matt! I appreciate great feedback to make useful on my next page!
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Steven Queen Byrne Robotics Member
Joined: 28 February 2020 Location: United States Posts: 950
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Posted: 05 October 2022 at 6:35pm | IP Logged | 3
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I fear I led you astray. I have to agree with Matt.
It's usually very hard to "fix" an existing drawing, in my experience.
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Paul Wills Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 05 October 2022 at 8:37pm | IP Logged | 4
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Steven - No, I also knew there was something 'off' with that last panel. And I very much agree regarding trying to fix an existing drawing - it's almost better just to erase it all and start over.I also agree with Matt's take on that panel - and just because it's hard for me to let it go, I went back and re-inked the cape parts (including some other stuff like the wood beam lines were too thick and a couple of corrections with shading and line thickness on Wolverine's arms). I pulled some issues where JB inked Doom to get some insight. He's such an underrated inker. Which brings to mind - Has John Byrne inked other pencilers? I don't ever recall seeing it. Anyway, this will be my very last attempt at this page - otherwise it will drive me bonkers! The good thing is I can take this lesson and apply it to my next inking work.
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Steven Queen Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 06 October 2022 at 12:42am | IP Logged | 5
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I think that's the best one! Everything feels more loose and natural to me. Few hard shapes.
The whole page is quite well done.
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Matt Hawes Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 06 October 2022 at 1:08am | IP Logged | 6
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That looks best of the three versions. The capes definitely look better in that one. Fine work, overall!
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Paul Wills Byrne Robotics Member
Joined: 18 August 2018 Location: United States Posts: 901
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Posted: 20 October 2022 at 2:41pm | IP Logged | 7
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Thank you, Matt! This is another page I wanted to revisit so I could work on my feathering technique. I also fixed other issues. I think it's an improvement (I hope) over my first one. Episode 7 page 16
Edited by Paul Wills on 20 October 2022 at 2:45pm
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Steven Queen Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 21 October 2022 at 12:08pm | IP Logged | 8
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Love the Mastermold. So Kirby. Nice Paul.
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Paul Wills Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 20 November 2022 at 4:55pm | IP Logged | 9
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I haven't posted in a bit but I'm always inking. I've been working on a variety of pages by different artists but I always come back to JB's work!Issue 32 page 11
Edited by Paul Wills on 27 November 2022 at 8:17pm
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Fernando Baez III Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 24 November 2022 at 4:27am | IP Logged | 10
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Paul, your inks win with me! Awesome work! it’s sharp!
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Paul Wills Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 25 November 2022 at 7:09pm | IP Logged | 11
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Thanks Fernando!I always look back on my work and see things that can be corrected or enhanced. I have made some inking adjustments with the previous post that I'm little more happy with.
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Craig Gassen Byrne Robotics Member
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Posted: 10 January 2023 at 4:43am | IP Logged | 12
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Just finished this page and wanted to get some feedback on the shading effect.
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