| Posted: 16 October 2005 at 10:05pm | IP Logged | 5
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Shawn: Since I'm one of the only other scriptwriters that hangs around in this thread, I thought I'd offer some comments:
1. First of all, you need to work through some character designs for all your major speaking parts with your artist, instead of having him come up with character's looks on the fly. Descriptions of this nature need to be left for minor supporting roles and should be left out of the script otherwise.
2. Since you're doing full script and not a basic plot outline, you need to give your artist more details. This is 1890! They didn't really have "sidewalks" to speak of. Cobblestones. Streets. Unless your artist is an expert on the 1890s, you need to give details. Provide them with reference if possible. Google is your friend.
3. You have far too many panels per page. Are you going for a classic, 6-panels-per-page style? Because even that format was abandoned by the time the Silver Age started. Vary it a little!
4. Though it's a diary-style, voiceover narration, you don't need to describe each action as its happening in every panel. Let the artist do his or her work and tell the story! If this person was really writing a diary, would he describe every little thing he does?
5. Use spell check! "Ascent" not "Assent." The letterer will thank you.
6. That's a loooong caption on Page 9. Consider breaking it up into a couple more panels or revising it downward.
Hope this helps! :)
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